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Post by Admin on Sept 4, 2009 22:17:49 GMT -6
- Try and divide your history into two or three paragraphs. Its tricky to read a wall of text. Its more visually appealing to the read as well. Generally it is six-seven sentences a paragraph.
- Sometimes you use 'brake' instead of 'break.
- You mention that the Tau fought alongside Space Marines at some point. Likely this were a traitor legion as they would likely join xenos in a fight. Loyalist Marines would not fight alongside enemies on the Imperium. Please change this.
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Post by Myen'Nan on Sept 4, 2009 22:21:08 GMT -6
Ultra marines fought along side tau... a few times
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Post by Myen'Nan on Sept 4, 2009 22:28:55 GMT -6
Out of Character Information Name/Chatbox Identity: Matagy Age: 16 Other Characters:
Rank and Direction Rank: Shas'la Weaponry: Pulse Rifle Wargear: none Training: Standard fire warrior training/ La'Vai close quarters training Specialisation: [ Sniping
Documented Information Name: Shas'La La'Vai Myen'Nan Age: 10 Gender: Male Homeworld: La'Vai
Psyker/Touched by the Warp: Tau so no
Physical Information Body Type: Malnourished Height: 6ft 3 Weight: 187 pounds
Armour Overview: His armour matches his home world's standard; Red plates with black cloth and a purple details on his antenna. His armour is pristine due to his squads role of suppressing the enemy from unseen vantage points. Upon the right wrist of his armour he has written his home worlds motto “Hurry up, but take our time”. Other that the phrase his armour is kept spotless however he does all he can to keep it from shining to keep from drawing attention to him and his squad. On his spare charge packs he often writes rhymes or simple jokes to keep himself calm on the battle field. He has one trophy; a chip from an Eldar's armour, to which he values for its lustre.
Countenance: His face is like most other Tau's. Nothing special; it is blue, with red eye's and black hair. He keep's his hair tied back, because it is both (in his opinion) stylish AND practical. He keeps his face clean enough, excluding his side burns which he keeps for warmth. His face is angled and sharp do to his body type. He does have a scar from being dropped at birth, though his hair covers it well.
Historical Documentation and Psyche Personality: Shas'La La'Vai Myen'Nan is a very calm fellow normally. He does like some familiar things in his presence to keep his cool however. Off the battle field he appears as a very happy person. He is usually cracking joke with the other warriors and sometimes will brake into song (though it takes ether a good tune or a drink to get him started). Fully believing in the Greater Good, Myen has little fear in him. Myen's belief often leaves him baffled by those who refuse and even oppose the Greater Good. Myen is fairly naive believing that in the end the Greater Good will always prevail even against insurmountable odds. However, Myen's joy and blind faith are a mask for his deep depression. When he was only five (ten by human maturity) he witnessed his father's death by the hands of a human rioter during a colonization celebration that became a human resistance target. This traumatizing event led to a break down causing an inability to express much else then joy. This leads to pent up emotions he uses as motivation when aiming his rifle. He doesn't often confide in people for fear of spreading his deep down depression.
History: Born on La'Vai, Shas'La La'Vai Myen'Nan had a normal life, up to the age of five. During a celebration of a recently liberated planet, human rebels started a riot which killed dozens of fire warriors AND civilians. One of the warriors was Myen's father who was beheaded before his very eyes. This led to a mental brake down two years later. This brake down led, perplexedly, to Myen being unable to show much beyond joy. The only person he talked to about the tragedy is his closest friend, Shas'La La'Vai Bri'Nas, the female he grew up with. Counting her as his only confidante he tells her almost everything, and she is the only one who know his deeper depression. He went through the normal fire warrior training and the standard La'Vai close quarter training. After his training, Myen was assigned to the first Cadre's Theta Squad along side Bri'Nas. He quickly took to the squads purpose; to hide in thick cover and quickly rain heavy fire upon key enemy squads. He became an accomplished shot and has a decent number of kills. He is most proud of the Eldar Farseer he had taken the arm off of during heavy rain. The killing blow, however, was dealt by the Cadre's leader. He did make a point of finding one of the shards of the Farseer's armour as a trophy. After a year as a fire warrior, his squad was invited to participate in La'Vai's “Ethereal Dragon” program, where squads are used as mercenaries to other races in exchange for soldiers as a form of currency. He has worked twice with Imperial guard and once with Space Marines. During these missions, Myen gained insight into human mind and faith, though still not enough to understand why they oppose the Greater Good.
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Post by Admin on Sept 4, 2009 22:42:25 GMT -6
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